I think I'll write a query in verse
Because it can't sound any worse
And now with that, here I go
Here's hoping that it all will flow.
Dear Agent, won't you read my novel?
Would it help if I got down to grovel?
Let me tell you about it here
And hope a request will soon appear
For my fairy-tale retold
About a young king with a heart of gold.
In a distant future time
Lives a princess who likes to climb
Dancing, though, she hates to do
Because it made her feel like poo.
(Hmm. Maybe I should work on that particular rhyme.)
She's trapped up in her father's ship
But it's nothing like a vacation trip
Because someone built the engines wrong
So she must dance the whole night long.
And this prince straight from her dreams
Might not be all that he seems
The sight of his awful, scaly tail
Makes her tender heart quite fail.
She escapes, but then those cursed fates
Stick her with a man she hates
When she becomes a pauper's wife
With a future full of poverty and strife
Then pirates capture them as loot
And make her clean the garbage chute.
Her demon prince appears once more
And drags her onto the dance floor.
Will she find her Happily Ever After
Or be stuck dancing with a monster?
To find out what her fate will be
I'm afraid you'll have to go and ask me.
Your story sounds so enticing!! I think the verse gives the fairtyale extra emphasis.
ReplyDeleteChersti--Maybe I should rewrite the entire novel in verse. What do you think?
ReplyDeleteThis is awesome! You should totally send it--if the novel were written in verse... Ha!
ReplyDeleteJeni, this is fabulous! Totally captures the breezy, lighthearted tone of your novel (as much as I've read of it, anyway). You COULD rewrite the novel in verse...or you could just borrow some of these rich details and add them to your query:)
ReplyDeleteElana--Thanks! I wonder if I'd have any luck using this as an actual query...
ReplyDeleteKrista--I might rewrite the entire thing in verse...if I sounded more like Shakespeare and less like Dr. Seuss. I'm not sure I could handle 200+ pages of Dr. Seuss. Maybe I'll have to try for borrowing the tone and details for my real query, since that sounds a little easier. :)
Actually I think the poo rhyme was my favorite part, but we really like potty humor around here.
ReplyDeleteLiesl--Apparently potty humor makes me laugh too because I couldn't bring myself to change it to something more dignified.
ReplyDeleteJeni,
ReplyDeleteYou might consider including the verse along with a slightly more conventional query letter.
Dad--I'm surprised that you don't consider this, a poem involving the word "poo," to be conventional. :)
ReplyDeleteHa. Jeni, you're awesome. :)
ReplyDeleteKaren--Thanks! :)
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